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He turns all the lights on so they'll think somebody's home.
He turns on the TV so he doesn't feel alone.
He prays to God above this is as bad as it gets.
He's too young to forget, and too old for regrets.
The clock tower rings and the people all shout,
But there ain't nobody there, so he whispers to himself.
He takes another drink from his bottle of Jackie D.
There's got to be something at the bottom, cuz there's nothing up here for me.
Do I have to stay awake all night
Just to have another soul to tell me I'm alive?
And he starts the new year lying on the floor.

What do I have to show for my wasted youth?
Nothing but a beat-up six-string and a hunger for the truth.
Got no one here to talk to, got no one here to see.
Everyone's got someone, ain't no one getting me.
Lipstick on the mirror says "Call me anytime."
He's too worried about what she thinks to call her tonight.
So he starts the new year homesick and alone.

Do I have another year in me?
©2009 ~Maich
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Author's Comments

this song is now available here: [link]

i LOVE this song. its so simple, yet beautiful in sound. its intended for just one guitar and another lead instrument, either harmonica or another guitar. no percussion. i also feel as though these could be the best lyrics ive ever written, especially when you hear them with the music. i know the pov is a little inconsistant, but the idea is when its in 1st person, its the thoughts of the same guy from the 3rd person parts. pleaase comment.

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This IS good.

Don't let the lack of comments let you think otherwise, practically all are meaningless on this site anyway c:

As for me, I have to be in an extremely mellow mood to give writing a fair shot. If not, I can't appreciate it the way it should be appreciated.

You're right about the pov switches, they're a bit confusing at first, but easily gotten used to.

Loved this line: "He's too young to forget, and too old for regrets."

But these two.. boy, when do you start recording?: "Lipstick on the mirror says "Call me anytime."
He's too worried about what she thinks to call her tonight."

Great Job, A.M. Great job.
:iconmaich:
thank you very much. conveniently, this song has already been somewhat recorded. ideally, everything should be done and online before the weekend. more likely, its gonna take me till next weekend to get the production right. you have to remix so many times. once it sounds good in headphones, you need to unplug them and get to sound good on computer speakers. after that, it needs to sound good on real speakers. i might get it done, though

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I look forward to hearing it sometime. You're on MySpace, right?
:iconmaich:
the link is in the author's comments.

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I imagined it sounding way darker/ moody so it threw me off the first time I listened to it. It's better this way, I think. I don't feel I should be saying this, only because I'm sure music is very personal to musicians.. so please excuse me and discard my comment if this offends D:

I just feel like a bit of variation in your tone while singing would keep listeners attentions sharper. I absolutely love the lyrics, and the music -especially the harmonica bit (was that you also?)- but the vocals were flat. I didn't feel anything while taking in that beautiful narrative. It felt too composed. I'm not sure if that makes sense or not... haha sorry.

Looking forward to more music from you, I think you have great potential.
:iconmaich:
yes, the harmonica bit was me. thats my favorite part, too. as for the comments, i appreciate the critique. dont apologize. ill see if i can change it up a bit more to make it more listenable. it does get a little boring after a while, i agree. so ill see where i can make changes. thanks

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:iconmoonelfknight:
Seriously, screw dA & the fact that crappy fanart will get faves & such when there's stuff like this everywhere. Fail

This is great; is it weird that i didn't find the POV switches confusing at all? (then again, I am an odd one). But I'm listening to the recording you did right now and I love all of the longing and feared emptiness in this piece. This is truly great.

(and harmonica solo! hooray!)

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i didnt think the pov switches were weird when i wrote it, but i could HEAR it when i was writing it, so i was biased. i mentioned it just in case other people thought it was weird. sort of like "im aware its inconsistent, but i dont care" glad you liked it. and special thanks for checking out the music, too

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wow.
this just....flows.
its like I can already hear the melody washing over these heart driven lyrics.
seriously alex.
wow.

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"There are better things ahead, then any we leave behind."-C.S. Lewis.

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